Election Speech

Ian Gould · [Mon Apr 18, 2005 10:14 am]

Election coming and the game is on....................again.
They think we don't realise the lies. We are after all (to a politician) thick. Only a vote to cast.

Good topical poem. Nice rhythm and rhyme. Well put together. Smile

Roy · [Mon Apr 18, 2005 12:39 pm]

I looked at your space and expected a sonnet.
The first wasn't one, but the second one is.
Election race poems abound, I'll bet on it,
But few with the wit of the great sonnetess.

Well anway, your poem was good Smile

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sravasti · [Mon Apr 18, 2005 1:38 pm]

I enjoyed your poem, made me think of the dismal elections we just had here in the US.

Well done. Your last two lines,

"So flash your dazzling smile and pat our heads
And tuck us in our little cardboard beds."

really hit home as to how these speeches are so general and abstract they make our lives general and abstract as though we are little paper dolls being tucked into cardboard beds.

annie

Anonymouse · [Mon Apr 18, 2005 10:33 pm]

Thank you, Ian, Roy and Annie for your comments. (I can't get away from sonnets, Roy, they just keep creeping in!!)
Yes, Annie, I feel we are as significant as a boxful of puppets to the politicians - our raison d'etre is just to tick the right box! Trouble is, I can't for the life of me decided which box to tick this time!

KieranJay · [Mon Apr 18, 2005 10:44 pm]

Hi Nony,

Who'd have thought the sonnet would lend it's form to such a topic so well. I like the way you comes across as angry that nothing changes yet still apathetic, that reflects my feelings on the matter quite well. And if we can't make our minds up there's always the monster raving looney party (if indeed they still exist).

This poem rolls off the tongure, it's really well crafted and easy to read, thanks for writing it.

Kieran

Anonymouse · [Mon Apr 18, 2005 10:54 pm]

Hi Kieran! Yes, angry and apathetic sums it up! As for Screaming Lord Such - he lost too many deposits to survive - but he is certainly missed as a credible alternative!!!!

Laughing

Jenny Darling · [Mon Apr 18, 2005 11:38 pm] **Vote for.......?**

Nonny! How wonderful to find you here too!! Loved the election poem - very witty and yes so true too.

Jenny
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Jenny Darling - mwah!

Anonymouse · [Tue Apr 19, 2005 9:11 pm]

Hi Jenny! Nice to hear from you and glad you liked my election speech. By the way, KJ, I think Lord Such & Co are still in the running!

Nony Wink

Mmagic · [Tue Apr 19, 2005 11:43 pm]

A super little ditty, packing real punch.

With such humour (words like 'poo' perhaps illustrating the infantile depths some politicians seem to plumb whilst pretending to hold the moral high ground), your message hit home hard.

Of course we're like puppets on a string to these guys. What a great image that served to underline the rest of the poem.

Loved this, thanks Mousey.

Andrew

maipenrai · [Sat Apr 23, 2005 2:00 pm] **election speech**

liked this one and oh how true it is, arrogant condesending bs pours out their mouths
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I know that you have suffered lad
but suffer this a while
whatever makes a soldier cry
will make a killer smile

L. Cohen

Anonymouse · [Wed Apr 27, 2005 7:14 pm]

Thank you Andrew and L.Cohen! The more I hear at the moment on TV the more I am committed to my little poem!!! Glad it says the same to you!

Anony
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"We are such stuff as dreams are made on
And our little life is rounded with a sleep!"
WS

Anonymouse · [Sat Jul 16, 2005 11:58 pm]

That would be Leonard Cohen, wouldn't it. Oops! orgive my ignorance, Maipenrai!
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"We are such stuff as dreams are made on
And our little life is rounded with a sleep!"
WS

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