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The Odd Couple


Outline: Observed on Saturday. I really should move out of this street. They're all loonies.
A female voice behind me shouts:
“I rate my friends as much as you!
I just think you should know!”
She speaks too loudly and there’s no response.
She’s talking to herself perhaps, or me?

But later, at a boot sale, there she is
With gentleman in tow.
I think she must find learning difficult.
He’s learning fast.
She’s large and middle-aged,
He’s grisled, wizending with scarlet nose.

She wants to buy a picture off a stall.
“The frame’s all broken but the picture’s nice”
She shouts to her young man and to the world.
A crude approximation
Of a Paris boulevard in oils.

And later in their rented room
She hangs the print upon the grubby wall,
While he below in the front yard
Smashes weeds into the wet soil
With a hammer.

Cul-De-Sac

[Mon Apr 03, 2006 5:40 am]

Odd way too remove weeds. Grubby walls, frumpy missus, blotchy old snoz...Hey Anony, don't invite me round to your street, just come round to mine.
Yuck, they sound awful. He's grisled, wizened with scarlet snoz and young. He must of led a tough life then.

I got your picture.

Cheers Cul
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Anonymouse

[Mon Apr 03, 2006 11:24 am]

Thanks for your comments, Cul. Yes, I have never seen anyone hitting weeeds with a hammer before. It seems a bit violent, even for this street! Rolling Eyes
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ASmallNumberOfMonkeys

[Mon Apr 03, 2006 5:05 pm]

I enjoyed this observation and the characters seem almost too familiar. I don’t have any problem with the hammer if I consider it a verb and that seems to fit quite well.

Keep watching for when he starts digging a big hole late one evening Shocked . Good one.

Mark
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mad lemur

[Mon Apr 03, 2006 9:29 pm]

Hi Anonymouse,

Could see that picture of a crude approximation of a Paris Boulevard. Seem to recall a misty, rainy scene was once quite popular.

Felt as if I was a voyeur watching this couple.

I think there are strange couples in most places. Supermarkets are usually their favourite haunt. Are you one of those people (like me) who get stopped by people of dubious character and asked obscure things?

The hammering of weeds reminded me of my brother when he was younger. He'd smash them into the ground, not much of a gardener these days, either! Laughing

Intriguing world around us, eh?

Good write.

ml
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Anonymouse

[Tue Apr 04, 2006 12:37 am]

We are in fact surrounded by loonies! The other day I was accosted by a woman in the local Boots, extoling the virtues of pant liners - only she called them "those things you stick in your knickies"!! I legged it to Babyfoods and hid behind a mountain of milk poweder tins until she had found another victim. God help us!
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Ian Gould

[Tue Apr 04, 2006 4:40 pm]

I love the last few lines but then those who have commented do as well. The hammer and the weeds says it all. She is the hammer and he is the weed, in his mind she becomes the weed. Just a little self gratification. She needs to be careful not to wear green.
A bit down at the moment but this made me laugh. Very good.
Ian
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strayshift

[Sat Apr 08, 2006 10:02 pm]

Enjoyed this Anon - yes the picture and yes a great closing line! As was previously said - watch out for digging at unusual hours!
A real slice of life and a great read

Gordon Smile
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Anonymouse

[Mon Apr 10, 2006 12:44 am]

Thanks, Ian and Gordon, for commenting on this little observation. Strange people live in this street. Yesterday I asked the people next door if they were going to do something about the double mattress they had dumped in their front garden. I found it dumped in mine this morning! Mad
I think I'll go and hammer their grass!
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PenJen

[Mon Apr 10, 2006 5:06 am]

Oh, ye have me laughing here - the mattress in your front garden?! The cheeky sods! Thank-God I live on the main street so no room for neighbour's rubbish. lol.

Interesting (or rather scary) characters in this piece - I have a very clear pic of this salt & pepper couple. They are everywhere and happen to frequent libraries very often. Especially the norman Bates and his Mother (aka Cruella De Ville) type and I always seem to land them. My co-workers seem to disappear... Confused

Loved the hammer and smashes - great line. Great poem. Lock your doors and windows at night, Anony.

Jen Shocked
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Jenny Darling

[Sun Apr 23, 2006 11:56 pm]

Now Nonny, I thought you lived in a refined area - well it once was anyway!!

I think I met your loonie lady too. I too have hid in Sainsburys!
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Anonymouse

[Sun Apr 30, 2006 12:53 am]

Thanks Mark, Jen, Hazel and Jenny for reading and glad it gave you a laugh. There are currently a a broken table, smashed mirror, computer monitor and two pine carving chairs out in next door's front garden! (The two chairs I put out last month for 2 minutes, went inside to get my car keys to load them up to go to the tip - and bingo! they'd gone. Now they have reappeared!) I have put my house up for sale!
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rainbowtree

[Tue May 02, 2006 2:27 am]

Laughing Excellent, so funny!
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vickala

[Sun May 07, 2006 2:53 am]

Embarassed I must learn to stop shouting in the street Laughing this is excellent, I promise I dont shout in the supermarkets though Very Happy , I loved the whole piece.

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