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Highway to Hell.


Outline: Reflecting on my life...
Why: Transferring it from GW
5th March 2006
Highway to Hell
Non-Fiction Author: Firecat
Created: 21 February 2005




We're on the Superhighway, a coachload of happy, excited people, partying to celebrate my life! My family and "friends" are all aboard. They ordered the coach, I paid for it. I am driving. The sign by my head says "Do not talk to the Driver!" ~ but that's OK, they all know what I want.

We're off to see the big sunset. We reached the Superhighway and they said "turn right!" They knew best, so I did.

We're driving as fast as we can go, straight into the sun, which is blinding me. Straight away, I knew I wanted to go the other way, to see the sun set over where I had been ~ not over where I could not reach. I wanted to turn round, but they were not listening. Eventually they checked on me and reassured me that I would love it when I got there, but the further I go, the more certain I am that I don't want to go this way with them ~ yet they are all my friends and family, and they all want to go there. I look in the other vehicles around us, it might be because of the sun but they all look happy to be going this way. And yet, the more I think about it, the more I notice the cars on the other carriageway. I cannot see the people's faces there ~ but presumably most of them are happy going that way ~ and there are plenty of them.

We've been driving so long now, my passengers are getting tipsy and jumping around. They seem to have forgotten me. I would like a comfort stop. Even if I can't go back, a break would be a mercy. My bottom aches, I am hungry and thirsty and I need to sit for a pee. They have other ideas. The sun is low in the sky now, sinking towards the twin peaks. We have no time to stop, so much they want to do before the sun finally goes down. I am also acútely aware of the time, the lack of it. Neither the time, nor the money nor fuel now to reach the other end of the road. I will never get there and I will always feel bitter about that. Yet, I am the "driver"! I would settle for as far that way as I can go ~ I dread the final destination this way. Dread it. I have wasted too much time dashing Hell for Leather this way, when even a little way down the other way would have done. Still, mustn't upset the passengers. After all, it's my life they are all so happily celebrating.

Author Explanation: I know I've taken the wrong turning in life, but I don't feel allowed to turn back!...

morrigan

[Mon Mar 06, 2006 1:53 pm]

i don't know whether to comment on this as a piece of writing or as a snapshot of your life?

yes, we all go down roads that we shouldn't but somehow had to, we are condemned to be free to do our worst to ourselves, or to neglect that which is so important to us ... we just do it, like machines, just do it, just do it, we keep on doing it until in the end we don't even know why. it's cr4p innit. bloody people. i prefer llamas.

in terms of this piece (sorry, i seem to have entered a reverie there), the coach thing reflects the idea that life is a journey and the passengers are those around it. the lack of comfort break or even ability to navigate speaks volumes.

interesting piece, now i'm all thoughtful.

regs

morrigan
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Firecat

[Mon Mar 06, 2006 6:44 pm]

Thanks, Morri!
I know I'm all introspective these last few years. Sad
We had a pair of llamas in our little local zoo a few years back (20, actually! Shocked ) They weren't very happy, though, very nervous, and I think she must have been already pregnant when she came as they had a baby and became even more skittish.
One day, the Dad came up to me at the fence. I was so pleased! I said "hello".
He leant right up to me, his face right in mine, then spat green goo all down my neck!
I'm not so sure about llamas now. Rolling Eyes
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Teresa

[Tue Mar 07, 2006 6:52 pm]

I found this piece really sad. It's full of regrets, and the inability to control your life. I say "your" because it just seems very personal, auto-biographical.

I'm one of those people who tells others never to regret anything. It's easy to say of course. But one thing is true, it's never too late to change course. I like this saying:
"Life is what happens when you're making other plans."

Live it Firecat, whatever it is you want!

This is a bit less review and more life coach, so I'm sorry for that, just felt like this account was a cry for something, unless it's all fictional and I've just bought the hype...

Stay happy all!
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Firecat

[Wed Mar 08, 2006 9:12 pm]

Thanks, Teresa, it is about me, and it doesn't feel like my life!
Please don't apologise for the life coaching (no pun!), I was ready to change course a few years ago and if just one significant other had OK'd it I would have done so; but I would have to break so many eggs to try and make my omelette it would be like carnage in a hen house. Rolling Eyes
Such is life.
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sazzyjack

[Thu Mar 09, 2006 2:15 pm]

Very nice writing, because of its autobiographical nature, it has a great power about it.

Saz
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Firecat

[Thu Mar 09, 2006 10:19 pm]

Thanks, Saz!
I don't think I've met you before, will pop over and have a look!
Cat
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achua88

[Wed Mar 15, 2006 1:40 am]

I agree with Teresa, that this piece of non-fiction has a sad tone. I like the conflict of the narrator, how he wants to travel in a different direction, while the other passengers are going the other way. But in the end, the narrator gets a feeling of dread as they continue towards the 'road most taken'. The piece is also filled with symbolisms - about road, the rising sun, the car, the family and friends.

The piece is short and compact, and it works well. It captures a single moment and experience well - along with the feelings and thoughts of the narrator.
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Firecat

[Wed Mar 15, 2006 9:34 pm]

Thankyou, Achua, for such a sympathetic review. Hug
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