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Poetry Showcase [Myths & Fairy Tales] Moderators for this section: Weaver, ochsterboxter, CadenzRime, Lingua Pura, ososment, carolynrn, Inker

The Gopidona

Outline: This is what I wrote at school when I was 10 and asked to write an animal poem. It was returned to me crossed through in red, 0/10, with a detention.
Why: Posterity
THE GOPIDONA

The Gopidona is a terrible beast,
And every night it has a feast
Of turkey, chicken, venison and moose,
Beef (when it's roasted), partridge and goose.

And, late each night, when it starts to snore,
It sounds like a lion, starting to roar.
It falls out of bed and falls flat on the floor,
And then, still asleep, it walks out of the door.

It raids its own larder, then goes back to bed,
And sleeps on, its eyelids as heavy as lead.

There's quite a bit more, but I want some rest,
So any more wanted will have to be guessed!
Andmymare
[Fri Dec 23, 2005 8:32 pm]
Erm, may I say, this was a worthy effort. Detention, what a load of rot. I couldn't have met you when you were ten, but, it sounds like a portrait of me. Pah! So, a posteriori, you've got your posterity. You wrote better then than..erm, well, good poem!
Andmygopidona

where did you get that title?
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Logicus tracticus
[Fri Dec 23, 2005 9:19 pm]
well my mare this is what a gopedona looks like to an american

Liked this little diatribe, or discourse ,firecat, now whats for pudding,
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CadenzRime
[Fri Dec 23, 2005 9:40 pm]
Nothing like a teacher to stifle talent isnt there.
This type of poem is write up my street anyway, although I would be tempted to add more seeing as you got such a good basis.

The reviewer would appreciate your comments on: Olliphant!!
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Andmymare
[Fri Dec 23, 2005 9:48 pm]
LOLOL. Just been around the world consequent to this poem and Logi's link. O O is funny.
O Firecat, is jolly.
O, eat me, is so funny! (I mean not in a naughty way).
Tongue out
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Firecat
[Fri Dec 23, 2005 10:06 pm]
Andmy, I did write better then, didn't I?!
Gopidona came straight out of my imagination.
My subsequent English teacher told us we should write from experience, not imagination. WHAT EXPERIENCE??
I don't understand your second posting. Embarassed

Logi and Cadenz, no pudding I'm afraid, I didn't want more detention. Sad
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Ian Gould
[Fri Dec 23, 2005 10:24 pm]
Enjoyed this poem.
A hearty laugh.
Ian Holly
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Firecat
[Fri Dec 23, 2005 11:46 pm]
Many thanks, Ian. Cracker
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Andmymare
[Sat Dec 24, 2005 1:06 am]
Firecat! I didn't mean you wrote better then than you write now!!
And I just meant I followed Logi's link to
like this:

It looks Polish but I could be wrong. It looks like something to eat. Is all I meant.

http://www.krstarica.com/lat/kuvar/index.php?clanak=govedina_pecurke&rubrika=kineska&podrubrika=
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Firecat
[Sat Dec 24, 2005 6:02 am]
And My, Sorry I'm an expert at getting things wrong, emotionally naíve I think! I never spotted the link! It does look rather good, doesn't it! Smooch Nikki x
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Firecat
[Sat Dec 24, 2005 11:52 am]
And Logi, thanks for the link and the avatar! Very Happy
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mad lemur
[Mon Dec 26, 2005 8:28 pm]
I was just glad this didn't turn out to be about sexually transmitted diseases...

(sorry, silly sense of humour)

Yes, nowt like SOME teachers to infer that work is worthless. I can remember a teacher scathing a piece of my work (D-) and then me writing it for the next year (well, a girl's gotta party at the age of 14) for another teacher and getting a B+.

I enjoyed your poem, Firecat. Gave me a smile.

ml
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Firecat
[Mon Dec 26, 2005 8:46 pm]
Actually, ML, that's one thing I don't know much about, and hope I never have to find out! Confused I certainly did not aged ten! Wink Thanks for the review. N.
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