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What would you like me to write about?


Outline: This was my opening work for Get Writing. (I wonder? Why did I start writing on Halloween?)
Why: For the record
Review: Honest
22nd November 2005
What would you like me to write about?
Poetry Author: Firecat
Created: 31 October 2004




What would you like me to write about?

I could write about the endless sea,
Of strolling on the strand,
And will my love come back to me
And hold my palid hand -
And was my love not meant to be
From here to eternity,
Not some brief sojourn by the sea
That ended prematuredly
Like messages in the sand.

I could write about the people
That like to give us grief.
I could write about the steeple
That fell on the folk beneath.
I could write about the frosty night
I caught a would-be thief.
Of Hover Flies that buzz like bees
Whilst sitting on a leaf,
Or Muntjac deer's coughing bark
When standing on the heath.

I could write about so many things,
But please give me a clue.
You'd best be quick - my 'phone now rings
And I have much to do.

To tell the truth I'm teasing you,
I haven't got a clue!




REVIEW:Poetry: A3206576 - What would you like me to write about? Oct 31, 2004

The Randomer [<18]

[Tue Nov 22, 2005 8:06 pm]

I liked this poem Firecat.

Interesting Rhyme scheme though it works well.

You've made good use of imagery with;

Quote:
Like messages in the sand.

it gives a clear and original meaning.

Good poem, well done

Matt
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Sammy-Sparkle

[Tue Nov 22, 2005 8:18 pm]

Nice one, FC.
Laughing Laughing Laughing Laughing Laughing
In my humble opinion, there are two ways to write a great poem.
1) Write about nothing at all, in as many words as possible.
2) Write about something really huge, in as few words as possible.
And then there's my way:
3) Write nonsense in however many words you can type before the booze hits in.
Laughing Laughing Laughing Laughing Laughing
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Firecat

[Tue Nov 22, 2005 8:32 pm]

Matt, thankyou! When I get a review from you I really feel I've done well! Wink
I'm glad you liked the imagery; I think I cheated with thew rhyming system!

Sammy, Thank you too!
Based on your three categories of writing, which, if any, was mine? Rolling Eyes
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Sammy-Sparkle

[Tue Nov 22, 2005 8:43 pm]

I'm not being critical, FC, perish the thought. Yours is option one, write about writing... as I've said here before, there's no greater art form than writing about writing itself. It's like making a film about movie-making (Woody Allen-style), or singing a song about 'Music' (Madonna, and John Miles in 1976, for the oldies).
To write about the history of the world, you have to condense it down to three verses at the most. To write about the pen in your hand, it takes at least forty-seven verses.
This is a great piece, just the right length, much better than the nonsense I'm about to post (as usual).
Laughing Laughing Laughing Laughing Laughing
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Firecat

[Tue Nov 22, 2005 8:54 pm]

Thanks for that, Sammy, I must go and see what you're up to...
Woody Allen I like, having been introduced to him (no, not himself, his films!) about the time of John Miles - but I don't remember the latter. Sad
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Bedford [<16]

[Wed Nov 23, 2005 12:34 am]

Oh boy I'm gonna be popular in the morning. Thought this was a great poem great idea and about eighty percent on the money, but i think you copped out some in the eternity, prematuredly? lines spoils (For me whats a cracker.) Oh well who needs friendlies anyway Rolling Eyes
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Firecat

[Wed Nov 23, 2005 5:51 am]

I did, didn't I? i think I read too much doggerel when I was young (that's it, blame genii like Lewis Caroll / Charles Dodgson).
No offense taken at all, you are absolutely right!
So, what's the punishment? Shocked
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deepthoughts

[Wed Nov 23, 2005 8:57 pm]

Lovely poem, enjoyed reading it. Just proves that there is so much choice as to what to write about. Doesn't have to be the same all the time. (Although everyone has a favourite topic- mine is love but i do try others)


The reviewer would appreciate your comments on: All in a days work
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Firecat

[Wed Nov 23, 2005 9:02 pm]

Thanks, DT. I had the advantage of it being my "first" work, thus having a clean sheet, free from the taints of previous encounters; I had not yet made the bed in which I lie (? Then how come the clean sheet?). Confused
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Bedford [<16]

[Wed Nov 23, 2005 9:09 pm]

So, what's the punishment? ..............No milk and cookies for one minute....Or Five poems and a haiku in a year.....harsh I know but I have seen enough of punishments both earned and meted out to last a life time. Shocked
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Firecat

[Wed Nov 23, 2005 9:14 pm]

Ah, no, I know how these punishments work! I choose the one and you give me the other! Shocked
I choose haiku torture! Rolling Eyes
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Bedford [<16]

[Wed Nov 23, 2005 10:33 pm]

Ah sure sod it skip the punishments life is punishing enough. Very Happy
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Clarissa

[Tue Nov 29, 2005 10:23 am]

Can't judge the poetic value - can judge the content which I was able to understand for a change.
No Writer's Block for you then! To quote SS:

Quote:
In my humble opinion, there are two ways to write a great poem.
1) Write about nothing at all, in as many words as possible.
2) Write about something really huge, in as few words as possible.
And then there's my way:
3) Write nonsense in however many words you can type before the booze hits in.

Seems a lot of poets on MW would agree with him!

Did enjoy this though but I think it also applies to prose. That telling line: What would you like me to write about???

Clarissa
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Firecat

[Tue Nov 29, 2005 12:01 pm]

Thanks, Clarissa, and for looking in too!
Glad I came overloud and clear, even though it was just a musing...
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