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The Day I went To Mexico

Outline: Zorro was there!
San Diego checkpoint checking ev’ry car
Tijuana sunrise blazing on the eye
Mariachi melody bouncin’ round the bar
Mescale worm in bottle is a high.

T shirt shop on Main Street selling vapour dreams
Offers also Uzi to protect a ton of grass
That guy was plum loco if he thinks I’m buyin’ that
‘Give me just a poncho and a wide-brimmed funny hat.’

‘Dos cervezas, por far vour, and play that tune again’
Senorita singing while marrackers click ‘n clack
Trumpets blast an eardrum with a Pancho Villa track
Singin’ dancin’ drinkin’ town wish I was goin’ back.
Sammy-Sparkle
[Tue Nov 15, 2005 1:13 pm]
Lovely flowing rhyming style, Ron, and a pleasure to read. Laughing
I think senorita needs a little squiggle over the 'n'.
Laughing Laughing Laughing Laughing Laughing
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Ron
[Tue Nov 15, 2005 1:28 pm]
Doh noh how ta sqiggle me hens, Sammy, so did it anyway and plum loco was I fer tekkin a plumber ta Mexico.

Cheers, man, Wink
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endakl
[Tue Nov 15, 2005 2:15 pm]
hey Ron, I was in Mexico City in July so I just had to drop in.. that first stanza was good, summed up the atmosphere nicely. liked Tijuana sunrise blazing on the eye ,though the haze obscured my sunrise most days - in the city.

and here's a chunk of reality ..
T shirt shop on Main Street selling vapour dreams
Offers also Uzi to protect a ton of grass

so a good collection of sights and sounds .. and you know you'll be back.

thanks, Eric
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Ron
[Tue Nov 15, 2005 2:49 pm]
Cheers Eric,

Nice ta meetcha, amigo,

Mexico City, eh? Wow, that's a giant city. You see any Art by Freda Carla while you was there, mate? She was hot!

Cheers

Ron
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endakl
[Tue Nov 15, 2005 3:02 pm]
hey Ron
I did visit the museum - all of her works were there along with some of Rivera's. I can take some and leave others - she was hot? ummm well I did like Cruz on film. Did you see any green cabs? ahhhh Agave ... I'll definitely go back someday.

Eric

Ron wrote:
Cheers Eric,

Nice ta meetcha, amigo,

Mexico City, eh? Wow, that's a giant city. You see any Art by Freda Carla while you was there, mate? She was hot!

Cheers

Ron
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Bedford [<16]
[Tue Nov 15, 2005 3:14 pm]
Never saw much but the senoria of senoritas Ron and a little border hopping, but loved mexico. Nice poem, nice people.(Except of course the loco ones) Very Happy
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Ron
[Tue Nov 15, 2005 3:56 pm]
Hey, Bendecco! Watch you mean 'we dohn need no stinkin' batches'? We needs stinkin batches, amigo! That's how we gets across ze stinkin border, hombre!
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Bedford [<16]
[Tue Nov 15, 2005 4:23 pm]
Knock three times and ask for emilio........you don't honest. Very Happy
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Ron
[Tue Nov 15, 2005 4:49 pm]
Met 'im an' he sez, Jose, keep that gringo head down... you go cross tonight in second batch!
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Ron
[Tue Nov 15, 2005 5:04 pm]
Wink Laughing
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Bedford [<16]
[Tue Nov 15, 2005 5:11 pm]
Back to bloody batches again gringo..........don need no steenkin batches Very Happy
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TallStoryTracy
[Tue Nov 15, 2005 11:41 pm]
I really liked this poem. I haven't been to Mexico but you capture an upbeat tempo that I would associate with mexico. You do this skilfully - I could almost hear those marrackers and see the bright colours.

But I have eaten the mescale worm! Shame on me - but you have to try these things the once. lol Rolling Eyes
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puddleglum
[Wed Nov 16, 2005 8:07 am]
I didn't understand every line but this seems a perfect atmosphere of Mexico, see it, smell it, feel it, hear it in the poem - it works very well.

I've never been but its as I imagine...

PG
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Ron
[Wed Nov 16, 2005 11:18 am]
Hi Tracy,

Aye, lass, you're right, there are colours in Mexico that pull your eye to the Rainbow People that they are.

And the worm? Hope you weren't greedy and nicked it before the bottle was empty? The worm is the Prize from the last drink out of the bottle of Mescala. Monster

Cheers
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Ron
[Wed Nov 16, 2005 11:24 am]
Hi PG,

I've only been there once myself, on that day trip, but it seems like everyone I know goes there for their hols now and it's a land filled with wonderful stuff to do.

Glad I could transport you there for a short while.

Very Happy
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