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Autumn Leaves

Outline: It may be all the time we have left...
So lazy Summer lingers in the air,
Recalling sunny days with every breeze,
And leaves reluctant to forsake the trees
Will tarry yet and will not leave them bare.
And so, my love, you stay a while with me
And we look back through happy Summer haze
At all the time we spent when we were free
To look ahead for even sunnier days.
But now November crouching in the wind
Will steal our joy with every icy gust,
And count each chilling moment now we must,
For at the ending of the year we find
That all may finish of that life so bright
And one of us will sit here in the night.
Ian Gould
[Tue Nov 01, 2005 1:14 am]
Good poem.
Quote:
But now November crouching in the wind
Will steal our joy with every icy gust,
love these two lines.
As the autumn of life draws on for this couple, only one of them will face winter alone. I find it a sad poem but then my interpretation may be wrong.
Good one anon.
Ian
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Anonymouse
[Tue Nov 01, 2005 11:04 am]
Thank you for reading, Ian. Your interpretation is correct.
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Bedford [<16]
[Tue Nov 01, 2005 4:42 pm]
Very sad, but then life is sad. All the time wasted in what may be instead of living full in what is.
Well written. Very Happy
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Anonymouse
[Wed Nov 02, 2005 10:14 pm]
You are right, Bedford. We should live every day and not waste a moment, especially not in always looking ahead into the future - or back into the past, come to that!
Thanks for reading.
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Jenny Darling
[Thu Nov 03, 2005 12:47 am] falling leaves
This is a lovely poem Nonny. Thank you for sharing it withus, and for the email.
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deepthoughts
[Fri Nov 11, 2005 11:50 pm]
lovely poem:) Love the way you describe things as it creats beautiful images.
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Roy
[Fri Nov 25, 2005 9:36 pm]
I was taken with the strong rhythms and rhyming pattern on first reading, and the familiar feel of the poem and its conventional phrasing blinded me at first to its subtleties - the reflecting on reflections, recalling the looking ahead, and if not regretting it, at least learning the lesson that we really do have to enjoy the times we have when we have them. At the end, one or the other is usually left behind: 'And one of us will sit here in the night'...

A lovely sonnet, Anony, which reads effortlessly as always.
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Anonymouse
[Sun Nov 27, 2005 11:25 am]
Thanks, Roy. Since you got me started writing sonnets I always value your comments!
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MarcelWilde
[Thu Dec 01, 2005 3:29 pm] Autumn Leaves
A very touching, sad love poem.

I think these lines are excellent:

'And leaves reluctant to forsake the trees
Will tarry yet and will not leave them bare.'

'That all may finish of that life so bright
And one of us will sit here in the night.'

Good poem.
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strayshift
[Wed Dec 07, 2005 9:08 pm]
A nice 'punch in the guts' sonnet Anon,
With yes Novemeber creeping in on the turn and almost a three line climax:
'For at the ending of the year we find
That all may finish of that life so bright
And one of us will sit here in the night.'

Yeah it kicked
Gordon
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cennen
[Sat Jan 07, 2006 8:13 pm]
A really beautiful and affecting poem. The word sound is lovely.
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Anonymouse
[Sun Jan 08, 2006 3:31 pm]
Thanks Marcel, Gordon and Cennen for your kind comments. I find the sonnet is a good format for expressing sentiments in a dignified way (and I am not so good with free verse!)
As predicted, I am now sitting here alone in the night...
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