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A Tourist In My Own County


Outline: A long weekend in Cambridge
A Tourist In My Own County

The Eagle pub and all that beer
Heroes of the Battle on each wall
Their names in candle-smoke so dear
They fought for One and All.

Racing at Newmarket all day long
And long the Odds on Angels’ Voices eachway bet
To stuff an empty wallet with a song.
But as it came in third on whistling wings my smile did set.

Photographs on Kings Parade a Mass of people by our side
While inside Hallowed Halls a Ruebens hangs in sacred pose.
King of Kings a baby then and yet to speak or stop the tide.
On the walls and coloured glass are crowns and griffins, dog and rose.

Rupert Brooke, oh Rupert Brooke, in your orchard we did sit
And cry a tear when reading yet again ‘The Soldier’.
But ‘Grantchester, oh Grantchester’ did make us fly, a flame was lit
And Church clock at the stroke of ‘1’ did chime ‘Yes’ to your question.

maipenrai

[Mon Aug 08, 2005 8:36 pm] a tourist in my own country

excellent piece
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I know that you have suffered lad
but suffer this a while
whatever makes a soldier cry
will make a killer smile

L. Cohen
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Logicus tracticus

[Mon Aug 08, 2005 8:49 pm]

SO then ron you had honey for tea ,and watched the setting sun then. Lots of history in that area ,even Pink Floyd mentions the meadows "Goes like In a churchyard by a meadow lazying in the haze of sunset.." will have to play it now very soothing.

even though this poem is short it reads resting at the end full day .I like the area as well, just come from reading re another nie bit of country just of the beaten track.

Enjoyed the interlude back to it.
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read once for meter, twice for rhythm
thrice for rhyme, then again for
leisure or measure of pleasure;
you: parasites of no consequence:
Larkin
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Ron

[Tue Aug 09, 2005 11:28 am]

Hi maipenrai and log,

Thanks for your comments.

Cambridge is my favourite city in Britain and I never tire of it. History is also my favourite subject and until yesterday I was unaware that there was such a thing as The Grantchester Group. The friends of Rupert Brooke included Virginia Woolf, Bertrand Russell, E. M. Forster, Augustus John, Maynard Keynes and Ludwig Wittgenstien.

Thanks, log, for the Pink Floyd pointer - interesting - one of my all time favourite bands.

Cheers both
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Roy

[Tue Aug 09, 2005 11:30 am]

Excellent poem Ron. Newmarket is in two counties, if I recall correctly, but 'king of kings' and Grantchester pinned it down. Only 'did set' and 'did sit' seemed a little clumsy, but now I see they could act as a kind of pair of bookends, a subtle repetition I didn't get first time. Otherwise I would suggest 'was set'. Anyway, that apart, a very evocative poem. Restful, as has been said, and satisfying.
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Roy

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Ron

[Tue Aug 09, 2005 11:49 am]

Thank you Roy, nice to speak to you again.

Yes, the weekend was indeed 'restful' even though we crammed a lot in.

Before we left Shirl and I went for a drink in The Rupert Brooke pub in the village. On the Tribute Board to him in the entrance is a quotation by his C.O., General Sir Ian Hamicton::

"Is it because he was a hero? There were 1000s.
Is it because he looked like a hero? There were few.
Is it because he had genius? There were others.
But Rupert Brooke had all three gifts of the Gods in his hands.
"

Says it all, really Wink

Cheers
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DavidH

[Wed Aug 10, 2005 7:19 pm]

It is an excellent poem this one, Ron, yes. Brings back a lot of memories for me. Years ago I would stay in Cambridge many times throughout the flat season. The Craven meeting; July meeting; the Dewhurst meeting - it seems like a long time ago now. And your poem, which somehow aludes to a long time ago (Rupert Brooke and all that) brings it all back. You know if this peom was a colour it would be brown. Nothing wrong with brown. Ok maybe it aint the brightest colour in the spectrum, but its a solid colour, I always think. Depedable. Dependable, good & honest. Like Cambridge and the church clock striking 3 at Granchester oh and, of course, this marvellous poem. Thanks for taking me back a few yrs.
Regards
David
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Ron

[Wed Aug 10, 2005 7:41 pm]

Cheers David, wish you'd been with me and Shirl at the track on Saturday... it was outstanding - my 1st race meeting.

Very Happy
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Fancyjean

[Wed Aug 10, 2005 9:25 pm]

I thought I'd return the compliment of a review, sad to relate I've nothing to say to revise, or correct, so no help in return, but the important thing is I liked it.

Yours David, actual first name, Fancy Jean I thought I'd go under the name : Jean Kelly but on Get Writing it was already taken, pretentions that I'd dance with words.
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Ron

[Tue Aug 16, 2005 3:18 pm]

Thanks, Fancyjean, glad you liked it.

Here's three photos from verse three, folks...

http://uk.msnusers.com/Freepoetry/somepics.msnw?Page=Last

Wink
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Fancyjean

[Tue Aug 16, 2005 5:27 pm]

Haven't been to Cambridge in a couple of years, dropped in there for a change of coach, the coach in front of us the offical Cliff Richard fan club, lots of screaming women and they weren't spring chickens anymore.
Before that with the college on a trip round galleries down there.
Odd to think those tutors in the main are dead now, though the oldest then still here, he had a strange look you couldn't put your finger on, he explained that he had been in the Navy doing mine sweeping duty off of Norfolk in the Second World War, one of the mines close to their aft heat blast was so great it incinerated his eyebrows and eyelashes off, once you knew that you kicked yourself for not observing it.
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Ron

[Tue Aug 16, 2005 5:57 pm]

Better to have asked and felt stupid than wonder for a lifetime in ignorance because I bet that that two minutes in your life has made you remember a Hero forever? And right it is that you should Wink

Cheers
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Ron

[Tue Aug 16, 2005 6:31 pm]

...and that is what Cambridge is all about Wink
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Fancyjean

[Tue Aug 16, 2005 10:31 pm]

I suppose he is a hero, but he'd be too modest to accept praise.
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Ron

[Wed Aug 17, 2005 11:09 am]

Well, I guess you're right... but that's what sets Heroes apart from The Crowd - their Humility Wink
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Fancyjean

[Wed Aug 17, 2005 11:57 am]

Takes all sorts, my father worked at his father's barber shop as a kid, as a towel boy, he learn to shave on old ballons, when they were really rubber and tougher, they would lather them up, and he would have to swipe a cut-throat over them, without bursting them. He told us what a bore the old boys were describing their war, the Great War, the one that was supposed to be the war to end wars, optimistic lot or pthinking wars could not get worse than theirs. But then it was a different war, much more dirt, disease and more a waiting game in the trenches, my old man was able to move about in the desert, best play pit going he reckoned.
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