Love Was Red

sravasti · [Sun Jul 17, 2005 1:49 pm]

Lovely haiku, Ron.

You expressed everything through condensing everything in a very few lines and syllables. Well done!

annie

Ron · [Sun Jul 17, 2005 6:17 pm]

Cheers, annie,

Somethings you don't forget, eh? Wink

Clarissa · [Sun Jul 17, 2005 7:05 pm]

That first love, Ron, was it the red MG or the woman? Wink

Clarissa

Logicus tracticus · [Sun Jul 17, 2005 8:41 pm]

mine was a fiat
Apart from the P D 2
I learned to drive in

nice one Ron ,did you ever wonder if you never had MGB you might have met a lady.
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read once for meter, twice for rhythm
thrice for rhyme, then again for
leisure or measure of pleasure;
you: parasites of no consequence:
Larkin

Ron · [Sun Jul 17, 2005 8:57 pm]

C,

Check the title again Laughing

Log, lost count of 'em, mate Wink

and if you liked this ditty you'd have loved my old Jag Laughing

Ron · [Mon Jul 18, 2005 11:55 am]

Log,

What's the P D 2 in your Haiku?

Logicus tracticus · [Mon Jul 18, 2005 12:55 pm]

london bus rear entry,
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read once for meter, twice for rhythm
thrice for rhyme, then again for
leisure or measure of pleasure;
you: parasites of no consequence:
Larkin

Ron · [Mon Jul 18, 2005 1:04 pm]

Aww, right on, man! Thanks. So... Routemaster Captain, eh? Nice one. In the 60s my Dad drove them and my Mam was his Clippy on the Midland Red

Cheers

Log

strayshift · [Mon Jul 18, 2005 1:38 pm]

Great Haiku Ron - made me laugh -
Gordon Cheers

Ron · [Mon Jul 18, 2005 1:47 pm]

Cheers, Gordon,

I've bin laffin about it since '74 Laughing

Indie · [Mon Jul 18, 2005 1:54 pm]

well done,

what a lovely haiku. especially because you've said so much with so little words.

it works really well.
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Indie

Ron · [Mon Jul 18, 2005 2:34 pm]

Thanks, Indie,

I didn't know what a Haiku was until I was told three months ago. Until then my poetry was always 'long' and filled with explanations - to be quite truthful it stil is when I'm not doing a Haiku because I also like to rant Laughing

Thank you very much.

Those Japanese don't need a thousand words to tell you what they're on about, eh? Don't you just love them? Ha!

Cheers

Love

Ron

PenJen · [Tue Jul 19, 2005 7:36 am]

Well I can't drive and I don't have a car but I do remember a boyfriend at the time arriving to collect me from work in the local hotel in his brother's 'flash car' (don't ask me what kind - I never noticed them things) and the exhaust fell off and I had to take off my tights (I was a waitress - we had to wear black tights - NO choice) to hold the frigging car together. Was mortified. After that he picked me up on his motorbike instead. Then all I had to worry about was my skirt...

SORRY Ron,

You got me going there and strangely when I first read it I did think it was the love of a woman but, no, no, no ye were into your wheels. Typical bloke... but hey, wonderful piece!

Loved the cheek and speed of it!

Jen Laughing

x

Ron · [Tue Jul 19, 2005 12:44 pm]

Oh, Jen, I'm nothing if not cheeky Laughing

and to put the record straight when I wrote Then met a woman I still loved cars but found real love Wink

Dan dee Lion · [Tue Jul 19, 2005 3:33 pm]

O how I wish my first love had been a car...instead I met an evil woman....still better to have...and all that shite....nice, amusing haiku...thanks...

Dan

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Love Was Red Outline: No one forgets a first love affair Can't forget first love Bright red MGB GT Then met a woman