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The Shade Of Warfare


Outline: An anti-war poem from a 'Shade's' perspective.
Why: fun
Review: any
THE SHADE OF WARFARE




As I slowly walked homeward
with my rifle and my pack
a young man stopped me suddenly
and this took me quite aback
for he could not know I was already dead
he could not see the scars
that have covered my whole body
since I went off to fight the wars.
He first asked about the rifle
which I carry on my shoulder
and when at first I did not reply
he grew a little bolder
and he asked about the ribbons
that my tunic proudly bore
and would he be able to get some
if he went off to war ?
How his family would miss him
but he'd return a conquering saviour
and wouldn't they be proud of him
if he went to be a soldier ?
To face the foe in far off lands
with not a trace of fear
unlike those who talk, but never go,
who fight battles from the rear.

When at last he'd finished talking
he looked straight into my eyes
and he must have been astounded
when he glimpsed The Reaper's scythe
For I am everyman
who has fought and slain and died
I have felt the vanquished's sorrow
I have felt the victor's pride
I've felt the rending of the flesh
The sudden loss of limb
The stench of death and its decay
as bullets shred the skin
But I had finally relinquished hate
and upon my own volition
before Lucifer had won my soul
and damned it to perdition...

So I looked at him in sadness
and a tear came to my eye
and I spoke to him in gentleness
for I had to ask him why ?
Could he not see the heartache
he would bring upon this earth
Just to maim and kill for decades more...
Was that the reason for his birth ?
For man is not just put here
to bring destruction to other races
and he would surely see that
if he looked deep into people's faces
For men are men the whole world ‘round
and should this be their fate
To fight for thirty centuries
just for bigotry and hate ?
So go home young man and think again
Don't decide in too much haste
This life is yours but only once
and to lose it is a waste
For should you choose to ignore my words
and you feel you have to go
Just pray you do not see the fields
where the wooden crosses grow.

Author Explanation: Dedicated to 'Bloody Sam' who (nearly) gave me the last line, which in turn gave me the poem...

maipenrai

[Thu Jun 04, 2009 8:22 am]

don't kow why you have not had any reviews on this one Chris.
It's a good anti-war piece .
Bernie
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but suffer this a while
whatever makes a soldier cry
will make a killer smile

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Tnarg

[Sun Jun 07, 2009 8:01 am]

Nice one Chris, very strong anti war poem with an excllent balance, not in any way 'mushy' nor overtly emphasising the violence (Both of which is so easy to do in such pieces), in fact I'd go so far to say it's the best anti war poem I've read for ages and even knocks efforts by poets like Motion into a cocked hat!
Cheers
Grant
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Zotikos

[Sun Jun 07, 2009 8:49 pm]

I agree with the other posts. This is good indeed

Quote:
When at last he'd finished talking
he looked straight into my eyes
and he must have been astounded
when he glimpsed The Reaper's scythe
For I am everyman
who has fought and slain and died
I have felt the vanquished's sorrow
I have felt the victor's pride
I've felt the rending of the flesh
The sudden loss of limb
The stench of death and its decay
as bullets shred the skin
But I had finally relinquished hate
and upon my own volition
before Lucifer had won my soul
and damned it to perdition...
This verse got me man; wow! your imagery, and wording is awesome.

If it's any compliment I'm rather nuanced about wars, because some have molded a few of our civilizations,but works like these really touch a humane nerve, which is necessary.
Thanks for this.
I'll add it to my favorites.
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Chris Ripple

[Mon Jun 15, 2009 10:23 pm]

Thanx Bernie, glad you liked it.

Tnarg. Not mushy ? The first time I ever performed this live I was accused of going soft... But I have to say I personally still like it and for something from the mid nineties, it's stood up quite well for thirteen years.

Zotikos. Hi dude, welcome, and all that stuff...
'awesome' ? Favourites ?
Hey, you can come back anytime.
Glad you liked it.

'moulded a few of our civilizations' eh ?
Hmmm... Probably best not to get a cynic started on that one...
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Tnarg

[Tue Jun 16, 2009 5:59 pm]

Congrat's Chris,
Looks like this one is heading for a very deserted place in the hall of fame!
Cheers
Grant
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Chris Ripple

[Thu Jun 18, 2009 7:16 pm]

Actually it's fifteen years... The typing's wearing out.

You know what Grant ? It matters not.
You've been to enough of the gigs to know that 'being published' is not my reason for writing.
I write 'em to perform 'em and that is where the 'interest' lies for me.

The strange thing is the differing meaning in a published piece on paper to a piece performed live and I have to admit I still find it odd that the two things can garner totally different reactions depending on how it's performed.
It is the same words after all.

Must be a psychological thing as those that work in print seem to differ from those that work live.
David Crosby, him out of Crosby, Stills, Nash and the other bloke occasionally, came up with a good quote last month, he said...
'We're descended from a long line of troubadors, minstrels and town criers...'
and that'll do for me.

See you at the gig, friday.
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