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Another fifteen minutes

Outline: Time flies.
The church bell rings the strident quarter hours
That chop the day into four hundred bites.
And fifteen minutes of my life has gone.

I sleep then wake and wash and dress - Dingdong;
Eat breakfast, read the post - Dingdong, dingdong.
And fifteen minutes of my life has gone.

Those hungry minutes rush relentless by,
Devouring all my days and weeks and months,
The endless years no longer mine to waste.

So much to do to say that I was here,
So little time remains to do it all
Before the final chime.
scarletdancer
[Thu Jan 29, 2009 2:28 pm]
Hi Anon,

Hmmm, I don't think I would like chimes reminding me every 15 minutes another 15 minutes has been taken off your life, especially when you are having a coffee and a smoke Yikes . So I aint moving near any chiming bells lol. A well written poem, thoroughly enjoyable. cheers, scarlet
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Anonymouse
[Thu Jan 29, 2009 2:36 pm]
Moreover, our church chimes two verses of "Within the churchyard, side by side" (or some such horror from A & M) every three hours - and through the night!! It certainly makes you aware of the passage of time!
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dreamcatcher
[Fri Jan 30, 2009 4:03 pm]
I enjoyed this a lot. It works very well and made me think. It's quite simple but well structured. i wanted it to go on because the rhythm is alluring but its brevity underlines the message. Good work.
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Roy
[Sun Feb 01, 2009 6:22 pm]
Funny (I mean not funny, but odd), I could have convinced myself this was developing into a villanelle, despite the evidence of my eyes...

Then the tapering-down, diminishing, 'slipping away'-ness put me right. Clever to do that, as though the 15-minute interval, despite its regularity, lessens with time.

As it does.

I like this even though I'd rather not be reminded of what it says!
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Ian Gould
[Tue Feb 03, 2009 6:25 pm]
I like the idea of hungry minutes devouring your time.
Enjoyed this, complete with the tolling of life and it's final chime.

Ian
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Anonymouse
[Thu Feb 05, 2009 12:03 am]
Thanks, Roy and Ian, for dropping in. I seem to be getting a bit obsessed with the passing of time. I should get out more!!
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BrianRobertNeal
[Thu Feb 05, 2009 9:21 am] Watto Anon
The counter on the micro-wave plays a similar role for me. Normally I can blank out the passing of time but somewhow watching its digital display count down to zero brings it into a sharp focus.

Somewhere the celestial "timer" is relentlessly ticking me off.

A good and obviously thought provoking read. You might be en-rapport with an old piece of mine on the subject of "tempus fugit".

Brian

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