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The Hejaz Line


Outline: One for train lovers, saluters of Heroes, wannabe heroes, and those who haven't already read it in the NaPoWriMo 2008 group.
Review: Any/all comments welcome
The Hejaz Line

'Twas the blazing Saudi Summer of 1980 -
52c in the shade in Tabuk
and no rain now for two full years.

But who needs rain
when wells a'plenty
built that ancient city?

Pity not the hot
for they have got
the lifeblood of the desert.

Garrison city now
and garrison city then
before oil
and amalgamated tribes.

A city of scribes
traders
Bedouin nomads
and Bedouin warriors
with impregnable fort
guarding the market
and the Hejaz Line
linking Damascus
to
Mecca
with Tabuk
the halfway point.

And 100 miles North?

Aqaba and Wadi Rhum
where Lawrence of Arabia
built a New Nation -
his Own Creation -
from out of a dream
when all seemed lost
to the Turks.

What works,
what schemes,
what daring-do
to forge anew
a People
from
the scattered
tatters
of rag-tag
ancient enemies.

He did it by killing
the Hejaz Line
at Halat Ammar
and many Turks in the bargain
as he cut their supply route
before routing them
from Aqaba too.

And in the blazing Summer of 1980 -
52c in the shade
and no rain now for two full years -
us wannabe heroes,
treading in the footsteps
of Lawrence himself,
took it upon ourselves
to chisel off the fire-door
from his most famous train
that hardly ever is wet by rain
so has never rusted
and we hung the door
in our Clubhouse Bar in Tabuk
and saluted him
with home-made gin.


Photo by Gerhard Henrich from this website


Photo by Gerhard Henrich from this website.

LMScott

[Tue Apr 22, 2008 5:20 pm]

Nice one Ron, a touch of class, and my own favourites subject, our very own National History, even in a foreign land.

Cheers H.
Magic
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Ron

[Tue Apr 22, 2008 5:57 pm]

Thanks, Gov' Wink

Trains move people fast from A to B.

Some people seem to be born with an ability to move vast multitudes really fast from blindness into enlightenment - T. E. Lawrence was one of these people. Wink

Cheers
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scarletdancer

[Wed Apr 23, 2008 4:03 am]

Hi Ron,

Suddenly the wheels are in motion lol. A perfect poem from and enlightened hand. Sounds like you've had plenty of adventure in your life. I've never been that interested in trains, but, the history in this poem is something I like. I studied ancient history at college, which, I think, ancient history is up to 1882, and dropped modern history loll. Therefore, all I really know about him is from the film. So, I enjoyed the read and found it an excellent write. cheers, scarlet
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Ron

[Wed Apr 23, 2008 12:23 pm]

Thanks scarlet,

In the late 60s, our school dropped ancient and gave us modern history - still at the height of the Cold War, I guess, and geopolitical 20th century history was far more important to us than pyramids, etc., and modern history and politics have been my favourite subjects since I first saw 'All Our Yesterdays' on TV when I was very young, so actually clambering all over that bullet-ridden, blown-up, train wreck in the desert was really special to us. We even had notions of bringing a big crane and low-loader to the scene and hauling the thing back to the power station in Tabuk to restore it.

I had a ball in Saudi and that train was one of the highlights. Wink

Cheers
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BrianRobertNeal

[Fri Apr 25, 2008 2:43 pm] Watto Ron

Firstly thank you for your kind and percipient review.

Like Scottie anything with a railway in it is an attraction to me.

Agood reflective, retrospective write.

Despite my love of trains only piece of mine ha a railway related topic,

Brian

The reviewer would appreciate your comments on: A Station Master's Son.
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Ron

[Fri Apr 25, 2008 3:05 pm]

Re my review of your poem On the stair:

No probs, mate, you know how much I enjoy reading your stuff - lost count of the number of your pieces of work I've commented on, including 'A Station Master's Son' which I found to be poignant too. OK

Glad you stopped by my 'Lawrence's train' poem - would have been cool to have had you there with us that day. Wink

Cheers
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Carol Kaiser

[Fri Apr 24, 2009 3:16 pm]

Cool
Amazing piece of poetry Ron....so glad I got the link to read it.
Carol.
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Carol Kaiser

[Fri Apr 24, 2009 3:17 pm]

....oh, and an amazing story too!
Carol
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Ron

[Fri Apr 24, 2009 5:10 pm]

Thanks, Carol, glad you liked. Cool Yeah, it was fun out there most of the time. Smile

Hot hot hot, with drinks cold cold cold and very strong. Laughing

Cheers
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Michael A Ryan

[Sat Apr 25, 2009 3:00 pm]

Cool Very very good Ron wonderfully descriptive. You've got to admit that Lawrence must have been a real tough kinda guy. I've been in close on 40c can't imagine what 52c is like? Ale Ale Ale Bleep

Mike.
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Ron

[Sat Apr 25, 2009 3:04 pm]

It's cool, man, real cool, in the right company. Wink

Thanks for coming on the journey. Cool

Cheers
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maipenrai

[Sat May 23, 2009 4:55 pm]

how did I miss this!!!!!
Excellent
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Ron

[Sat May 23, 2009 5:16 pm]

You didn't miss it, good buddy, you got there eventually and it is the journey, not the prize, that is most exciting in life. Wink

Glad you enjoyed. Cool

Cheers
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