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A Four Letter Word Beginning With 'F'.

Outline: I came second in a poetry competition with this and received a cheque for twenty five quid... It was the only poetry competition I've ever entered. I'm not in competition with anyone.
Why: fun
Review: any
A FOUR LETTER WORD BEGINNING WITH 'F'.




Not in bondage or under restraint
Living under a government based on consent
Not arbitrary, despotic or under domination
Unconfined
Unrestricted and released from authority
At liberty to choose and at liberty to act
Independent
Unconnected with and unattached
Released and exempt
Unconstrained and not limited
Careless and reckless and unconventional
Forward and impudent
Unreserved and gratuitous
Broad, frank and indelicate
No restrictions, spontaneous
Not a slave or a serf
but to set at liberty
Just a simple four letter word
but it does mean a lot to me.
Author Explanation: Somebody had left a bag outside one of the local charity shops all night and the local pondlife had thrown it everywhere. Part of what they had left was a 1934 dictionary which fell open into the 'F's... All I did was rearrange the meanings into something nearer 'rhyme' and 'metre...' Then I sent it off. Second place... Honestly, you have to laugh...
BrianRobertNeal
[Tue Mar 18, 2008 4:32 pm] Watto Chris
I'd love to live somewhere that all that was still the case, Wouldn't you?

This should "orate well"

Brian

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RichBitch
[Tue Mar 18, 2008 10:26 pm]
Fascinating! And all cos the 'pondlife' was in action that night! lol
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Ian Gould
[Thu Mar 20, 2008 1:28 am]
Out of the slime they come to inspire you.
Enjoyed the poem.
Good un.

Ian
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pamela
[Thu Mar 20, 2008 4:22 pm]
very clever thought Chris, I don't think anyone else would have thought of doing this and if they did. . .I bet they wouldn't have won £25 Very Happy

Excellent write,

Pamx Very Happy
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maipenrai
[Sat Mar 22, 2008 8:06 pm]
up to your usual good standard Chris, a good write.
bernie
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Ian Gould
[Sun Mar 23, 2008 6:32 pm]
One thing, Chris. There's no F in sun. Laughing

Ian
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Logicus tracticus
[Sun Mar 23, 2008 7:02 pm]
Feel you could lose many of the "and"s in this without detriment to the work, other tweak

No restictions, spontaneous(missing an "r")
to
Without restrictions, spontaneous...

Interesting to compare page with 2004 dictionary...

worth a read though
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scarletdancer
[Mon Mar 24, 2008 12:03 am]
Hi Chris, a very clever and interesting poem. Congratulations on winning second prize. The word 'free' dominated my mind when reading this An excellent write. cheers, scarlet
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carrieann
[Thu Mar 27, 2008 1:19 am]
It's the title and the last two lines which make this. It grabs the attention and stays in the mind, so I'm not surprised the judges saw fit to award you a prize. The rest of the poem, the dictionary definition, thorough as it is, merely serves as essential back-up. Clever thinking, Chris. Well done.
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Philip Graham King
[Thu Mar 27, 2008 12:00 pm]
Hi Chris

It's always the simplest ideas that work best I reckon.

I s'pose throwing the stuff in to the pond comes under the definition of

Quote:

Unreserved and gratuitous


A well deserved prize winner tho'.

TTFN

Phil
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Chris Ripple
[Sat Mar 29, 2008 6:08 pm]
Since I only sent it in as a joke I was amazed to find I'd won something, and that is one of the reasons I don't do poetry competitions... because I won second prize with two lines and a dictionary definition.
Sorry Logi', I know you don't like 'and's but they were all in the original definitions and I just copied them then added two lines.
I think Carrieann is right when she says the title won the prize because everybody expects something they didn't get... They did at gigs, too.

It is also quite strange to look up 'Free' in a current edition and look at how the word has changed it's meanings in the intervening 75 years.

Glad you all liked it.
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