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Shall I count my days by pant liners


Outline: A dreary poem written on a dreary day.
Shall I count my days by pant liners?
And duly discarded socks,
From drawer to feet to washing machine
The daily cycle …?

Or by the regular ingestion
Of breakfast, lunch and supper,
Three times a day, twenty-one times a week,
One thousand and ninety-five times a year,
Sucking up time with spaghetti,
Spitting it out in cherry stones…?

Or by the predictability of television,
Eastenders, Emmerdale, Neighbours, Corrie,
Living vicariously from week to week
As plots unfold and repeat and repeat and repeat…?

Or by the arrival of bills –
Weeklies, monthlies, quarterlies,
Yearlies…?

By turning the pages of newspapers,
Magazines, timetables, diaries?

So we measure time and life itself slips by,
Day after hastening day,
Set on automatic pilot,
Till death itself shuts us down,
Organ after organ,
Brain, lungs, heart…
.

scarletdancer

[Wed Feb 06, 2008 1:04 am]

Laughing Laughing , you need a wild, passionate love affair to raise your spirits and make you feel alive again. Either that or get a cyber lover with no strings attached Shocked . No, just kidding. I like the play on words. I realy enjoyed the read, great stuff. cheers, scarlet
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bulldozer

[Wed Feb 06, 2008 1:56 am]

Hi, Anonymouse

A interesting poem and a good write also.

Cheers

danny

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morrigan

[Wed Feb 06, 2008 8:49 am]

an interesting echo of 'how do i love thee', minus the love, so just the drudgery ...

time and tide waits for no man.

yes i liked it well enough.
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carrieann

[Wed Feb 06, 2008 8:50 am]

Oh dear, life can't be that bad, can it? Mind you, you are right, there are so many seemingly endless cycles. That washing machine going round and round and round... hard to think of it this way at times, but I'm kinda glad it's rarely empty. Could be used as a metaphor for a life that's full and active, even if it is on constant repeat.

Was changing the bill verse in my head, there to (in my case) the arrival of children... yearly, two yearly, five yearly Laughing

Good one, anony.
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Cul-De-Sac

[Wed Feb 06, 2008 10:36 am]

Oi, Nony cheer up!
Come down here it's 30c the surfs 24c and the cleaning lady comes on Friday and does all the hard bits and the boring bits and Monday the washing machine lady does...the washing Smile

We still do the ironing though Sad
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metman

[Wed Feb 06, 2008 10:46 am]

Thoroughly enjoyed this. This is what deep mid-winter does to you!
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maipenrai

[Wed Feb 06, 2008 12:25 pm]

good write, enjoyed it

cul, p off Smile
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Cul-De-Sac

[Wed Feb 06, 2008 7:36 pm]

maipenrai wrote:
good write, enjoyed it

cul, p off Smile
Bernie



Ha haha, Bern, the beers bloody cold too, so you'd better come down too... Cool
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BrianRobertNeal

[Thu Feb 07, 2008 10:18 am] Watto Ano.

Boredom is nature's way off telling you that at a particular moment nothing is going seriously wrong or if it is you've yet to notice.

I've come to treasure it,

Brian

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Philip Graham King

[Thu Feb 07, 2008 11:33 am]

Hi there

Sometimes it does feel like we are just marking time (particularly with the grey weather and dreadful TV).

I paricularly liked the lines:
Quote:

Sucking up time with spaghetti,
Spitting it out in cherry stones…?


Cheers

PGK




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Logicus tracticus

[Thu Feb 07, 2008 2:00 pm]

think if your counting the days perhaps your looking forwards to the nights.....

point on duly discarded socks, (and those that walk away under their own "steam" are they 'duly discarded'..

nice one
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Inker

[Thu Feb 07, 2008 9:23 pm]

Glad to see you're not counting it down in Tena incontinence pads, lol.

As I don't watch that much tv these days, I wouldn't much know what goes on, or when it goes on, but I empathise with the message in your words.

Time moves on; we try to beat time in many ways, or some do, but it will always win. Best way is to move with it, keep smiling and then peeps will wonder why the hell you're so happy. Only you know and that's because you know something they don't...

Not sure if the mention of Brain, lung hearts at the end is really necessary, me dear, but tis only an observation.

Bestest,
Inker
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spiderbaby49

[Fri Feb 08, 2008 2:10 am]

Eh lass. Tha's took the very thoughts out of me 'ead and put them down in a gradely style.

Don't know where the accent suddenly sprung from.
Well written womanly angst.

spidey
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