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MummyPenguin · [Thu Oct 04, 2007 6:52 am]

Wow Cul what an impressive array of words to look up in the dictionary. I loved every minute! Very Happy

Cul-De-Sac · [Thu Oct 04, 2007 12:24 pm]

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Logicus tracticus · [Thu Oct 04, 2007 1:01 pm]

trying to recall, another one of yours re piltdown..or may have been "Lucy"..Plithe`d presume you mean from betrothed wed
promised to..

think this would benefit from four four four line up.. back to de-ja vou again as this reminded me of watching the hedge laying competition along the A27 a couple of decades ago ued to go along the road often, see here
A dieing art mostly because the stock is dwindling and factory farming, of course I'm talking UK oz fences being as long as great wall of china if at all.. liked this cul it flowed well

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Andmymare · [Thu Oct 04, 2007 4:25 pm]

I really like this. I'll get back here.

Cul-De-Sac · [Thu Oct 04, 2007 11:40 pm]

G'day Logi, M's Mare. All those words came from a UK site dedicated to hedging and I played with them and then htought of the Piltdown Man. I don't think marriage comes into it Logi.
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Andmymare · [Fri Oct 05, 2007 12:05 am] **Oh, but**

Cul,
let me try. As usual, in understanding your poem, I learned so much. I saw drawings of different styles of hedging. I didn't imagine there were competitions at it; but, there's snow-ploughing competitions here, so, why not? Anything people can do they'll try to get together and have at it, with and against each other.

I like this very much.

'Piltdown Mans been pleached
Billhooked till the sap weeps
Laid down sideways awaiting
Suckers that emanate, creep.

(Man's - Man has)
'pleached'; what a great word, I saw drawings of it when I found the definition. It echoes 'bleached' in my head. I couldn't help but see/hear a double meaning for 'suckers'; added to the little roots that grow up new ones of whatever you've got there, AND, 'suckers', people who come to see, to fawn and gawk, maybe for money. I don't know if that's what you meant, but when I got to the hoax part, I just thought it. This is really, really good in its sound and pictures.

Hawthorne ribbons the paddocks
Hedging him in, Midlands style
Hethering in hazel twists
Fit for a bullock raging
Poor Pilts’ been plithed
Pleachers crossed flat by crooks
Crop is a stake
Driven into Dawson’s hoax.

I can't find what 'plithed' means. Separated, woven? I can see why Logi thought of plithe betrothal. (say that fast with your beer in you). There you go again with the 'crooks', I see the billhook, but also schisters, and crops staked, too strongly, (fit for a bullock raging!). right into old Piltdown's chest.

I think this is one of your best. Reason I say it is it's compact, soundworthy, one-pointed in despite of the double readings/meanings I've harvested, rueful, calling a spade a spade, and strangely, strangely grounded. Literally grounded. Agricultural, cultural. Big mind at it again. Oh how I've missed reading you.

ahm, you have a synthesizing mind.

Okay, Backinov here,
'Midlands style' eh? What an art, to hedging, what a stake is a crop, when you're lying sidewise, in the way.

Andmymare

Cul-De-Sac · [Fri Oct 05, 2007 12:54 am]

What a perceptive bit of observation. Yes it is interesting isn't it, I wish I could remember when I did this, I know the why.
Wrote it quick too.
Ah I just remembered part of the reason for this...Mike Olfield.

Of course you say..Oldfield?
Tubular Bells side 2[?] Piltdown Man howling.
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A man called Valance · [Wed Oct 31, 2007 7:08 pm]

Interesting, Cul. Cryptic, maybe. Sorry that's no help, but at least you'll know I took a squiz.

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arthurian · [Thu Jan 10, 2008 8:43 pm]

I love this Cul - it conveys the mashed up state of the bodies recovered from peat - usually discovered by peat cutting. Seems to fit. Reminds me of Heaney too - but still very different.

G.

Cul-De-Sac · [Fri Jan 11, 2008 3:55 am]

Thanks for having a read Gordon, I'm glad you enjoyed it, I like it too.
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Inker · [Sat Jan 12, 2008 9:49 pm]

Hi Cul,

Have read this a few times, enjoying it more with each reading.

A lot going on amongst the language: the sounds; the history; the scenes. All very clear and well-presented through choice of appropriate words.

Andmymare summed it up well and I, like arty, could see this body being churned up as the peat is cut.

I'd have liked this to continue, to be told what happened after the ground had yielded its victim, for I perceive this 'man' to have been a sacrifice or mugged. Perhaps a further magniloquence could be routed from you, cul. But then that's me being greedy, lol.

(Three corrections...one already shown by AMM - Man's; another - Midlands-style; final one - Pilts' should be Pilt's.)

Nitpicking aside - a grand set of words and would hope you write some more soon.

Bestest,
Inker

bulldozer · [Sat Jan 12, 2008 10:12 pm]

Hi, Cul-De-Sac

a interesting poem and a good write also. Wink

Cheers

danny Smile

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Cul-De-Sac · [Sun Jan 13, 2008 10:17 am]

Thanks H and Danny, glad you enjoyed it. I wish I could reproduce the fit of invention that led to this but sadly it's long.

cheers
Cul
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A man called Valance · [Sat May 03, 2008 7:03 am]

Hello, Fenced-out. What's to stop you reproducing that fit of invention?
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