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The Passage

Outline: Life is a passage
Why: Better out than in.
Review: Anything is better than nothing.
Life is a passage,
A long dim corridor
With many doors.
Behind them sit people,
Laughing, deriding.
I soon learned
Not to open doors.
The passage floor is lined
With the finest
Rice paper.
Every twist,
Every turn,
Every touch
Leaves its print,
Its mark,
Tears, creases,
Stretch marks,
Ripples, blisters,
Bulges.
After my first few tentative steps,
In fear of my persuers,
I learned the considerable skill
To walk the passage
And leave
No trace
Author Explanation: Inspiration as always came from my morning dog walk. Actually, that's not true, it's been stewing for many years, but it came together on the walk. Walking the rice-paper lined passage leaving no trace was actually one of the rites of passage at the start of the 70s television series Kung Fu.
pamela
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[Tue Aug 28, 2007 2:52 pm]
Hello Firecat,
This is a great poem. I understand everything you're saying here but don't forget your mark is precious. They're your footprints on the world and I bet there are many good people who would love to follow them. Some people are spiteful but that just makes you so much better than them.
Your poetry is wonderful, Pam

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BrianRobertNeal
[Tue Aug 28, 2007 3:02 pm] Hi FC
Life is a labrynth of passages some you can access and some are barred, many can be retraced but the options grow fewer as time goes by. Ultimately no matter how heavy the footfall all one's steps will be erased.

A thought provoking read,

Brian

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scarletdancer
[Tue Aug 28, 2007 8:18 pm]
Hi Firecat- I like this poem, it's great. No matter how you choose to live your life, you are entitled to, it's your life. And besides, your path like all of ours will cross with many types of different people. Excellent write. cheers, scarlet Smile
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Ian Gould
[Sat Sep 08, 2007 11:16 am]
I love the use of the rice paper idea.

You would think that we would know how to light the corridor by now. Confused

Excellent poem that stands well and scratches it's name on time.

Loved it.

Ian

Aaaah, Grasshopper, you have learnt well. Now use the rice paper for those macaroons you're making.
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