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Outline: Another sonnet rising like a phoenix - but still not too cheerful!
My heart is lying quietly in the shade.
Pass quickly by and do not stop to stare.
As broken hearts are seldom on parade
It could be that you will see nothing there.

This heart once with a violent passion burned,
Its alchemy fuelled with a flame so bright,
That everything into pure gold was turned,
Consuming every other feeling quite.

But then the air it breathed was drawn away,
And weak flames were unable to revive
This blackened core that charred and smouldering lay.
And my poor heart gave up the will to live.

If your sweet breathe could kindle but a spark
My heart’s new night would still prefer the dark.

ASmallNumberOfMonkeys

[Thu May 11, 2006 12:55 pm]

I’d better do some more of these, yours are getting quite good. I’m enjoying seeing all these sonnets and trying to write some myself. Thanks for this one.

Mark
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Anonymouse

[Thu May 11, 2006 1:28 pm]

Thanks for the vote of confidence, Mark! Much appreciated. I too will soldier on.
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Logicus tracticus

[Thu Jun 29, 2006 12:10 am]

My heart is lying quietly in the shade,
slight tweak perhaps
My heart lies deathly quiet here in the shade;
using here reenforces silence:
did also read
For broken hear'ts
two broken hearts =4 pieces,
but then thats me shame no one else has found it
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Anonymouse

[Thu Jun 29, 2006 12:44 pm]

Hi Logi, thanks for dropping by! Yes, your first suggestion is good.
The second one baffles me. I'm only talking about broken hearts in general and not in particular, so "four" bits of broken heart don't necessarily apply - or have I misunderstood?
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Logicus tracticus

[Thu Jun 29, 2006 1:21 pm]

My heart lies deathly quiet here in the shade;
Pass quickly by and do not stop to stare
for broken hearts are seldom on parade
It could be that you will see nothing there.

about broken hearts in general, since you said hearts = more than one so four pieces other than three, i:e yours and the person that broke it, whom no doubt at the time stated to all he did'nt have a heart Wink does that aid understanding or compassion to someone more confused than ewe
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Anonymouse

[Thu Jun 29, 2006 9:27 pm]

Oh baaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa! Laughing Laughing
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